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Ok I get it now ... AND if I stare at the eye for a few secs I can see the 'cut off/ not enough pupil' look you are trying to convey. I might have a similar shot that doesn't have this ... I'll have a look now that you've got me intriqued.Quote:
Originally Posted by kat
Hope that back isn't a big thing.
Yah! That's what I mean.
But none the less is doesn't take away from her beauty!
(Oh..a weekend of playing womens hockey and the back tends to go out :) )
I already had this one in the same album. It's a good example of the photographer being too engrossed in his subject and not looking for background distractions. See her heel? The towel next to that? And the washing line? Doh.
It does however show more pupil for you :D
http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3125/...c44e614f_o.jpg
Yah. I like the eyes in this one better! More captivating!
Ha ha..I went out and did my nephew and niece in the fall. 90% of the photos have my nephew with one collar in his jacket and the other out!!!! Ha ha.. I learnt big time on that..but I really do think with more experience those things happen less and less...or so I hope! :)
moved the photos in the first posts to a different album for those who couldn't see them
I like these shots but of course I usually have some comments for improvement.
I like shot 1 the best as it has the best drama of all the shots which for me makes it most interesting. I feel there's a bit too much hair covering the face and her left eye could be a tad sharper, but nice shot. Lose the feathers.
Shot 2 - The eyes look quite nice but the first thing that comes to mind is the position of the head which seems to me to be a bit 'off'. There a bit too much tilt in the head for my taste.
Shot 3 - (post #2) Same comment as shot 2 with the weirder head tilt though the eyes look quite good and this does come across as a sultry shot. Not crazy about how you cropped through the middle of the arm though and not at all crazy about the feathers.
Shot 4 - as mentioned has distractions in the background most notably the feet. Again the eyes look good but again the head tilt/body position is not doing it for me, nor are the feathers and the pillow she is lying on.
All in all these are good but the posing should be conventional when you are starting out. Take a look at recent fashion magazines and wedding magazines for a better idea of posing. Hope that helps
Marko
Thanks very much Marko.
To be honest I just let Allyce choose the poses she wanted (and I adjusted from there) and the feathers were her wish as well. I would have like the feathers to be blue or maybe even yellow I think. The snake (not a pillow) was my idea though.
In the end though, although the shoot might be restricted by the clients wishes, I guess the photographer still has the responsibility to make sure the end result is professional.
I'll be watching out for the things you mention next time for sure.
DOF was a difficult when doing these close up shots. To get both eyes in focus when they are not on the same plane was a challenge indeed. I should probably get over the novelty of my 24-70 L Series lens (I figured the wider angle would help with my DOF) and maybe try out my cheapy 50mm Prime 1.8 so I can get higher f-stops.
What about props Marko? You didn't like any that I used at all. Are there props you do like? Or are props something you don't tend to like in this sort of closeup portrature?
The props here for me are an absolute distraction. The magic in all the shots takes place in your daughter's eyes. The feathers do not at all help the shot, so, IMO, they are distractions. For me, any prop used should add or help the shot. The bright burst of pink does not add to the shot, it takes the viewer's eyes away from the magic of the eyes and competes with them.Quote:
What about props Marko? You didn't like any that I used at all. Are there props you do like? Or are props something you don't tend to like in this sort of closeup portrature?
Also - the feathers are not really a modern prop...um...kinda has a burlesque feel which isn't the intent of the shot (imo). Compare that to the necklace in shot 2 which ADDS to the shot and is not a distraction and does not compete with your daughter's amazing baby blues.
Hope that helps,
Marko
It helps greatly indeed!! Thanks.