Suo Gan

[theantiquetiger]

Ok, let me try this critiquing thing again.

I cannot comment on the technical side of it, So I will gave you my layman's view of what I would try and do if I had this great shot. I feel the smoke is great but is also robbing the shot. Could you darken in some of the blacks (i.e. Her bra, the back of the guy on far right with shadow of his head down his back).

I'm not sure if I am even using the correct terminology, but maybe more contrast (sharper blacks, whiter whites). I've seen some great shots of jazz and blues bars down here in New Orleans, and you came close.

Edit: After studying the image a little more, IMO, I think there is too much dead space above the figures (I may have cropped it just above the lowest spotlight) and too much to the right (I would have cropped just inside the water bottle in btm right corner).

Like I said, this is just my layman's critique. You have a great shot here and with just some minor tweaking, you can have something outstanding!!!!