Welcome to the forum Sarah,

For comments on this series, I'd pay attention to brightness distractions and 'holes' in the image. The eye naturally wanders to bright(est) areas in photographs, try placing the focal points there especially when you are in full control of the light. Be very attentive as to how and where it falls on objects in your image. In 2/3 of these images the brightest element is bare light on a whitish colour which for me is a distraction. noticeable

Hope that may help